不断练习写作还是5分?抓住这些扣分原因,你也能稳稳上7!
关于写作,一篇能让自己满意的文章需要在很多方面都表现很棒,当然,要追求哪里都没瑕疵也是不可能的,我们能做到的就是尽量减少出错,从许多细节上来拉分。今天想跟大家分享下同学们在备考时经常被忽略的点,如果能避免踩这些雷,分数可以达到更稳妥的提高。首先说下表达方面,受中式写作的影响,我们可能很喜欢在写作上充分表达自己的“思想深度”,实际上,规定式作文的拓展空间本来就非常有限,所以只要把作文按命题要求表达顺畅是关键。
表达方面可能还不是大硬伤,将自己的语句做到尽量不犯错误才是不丢分的关键。大多数同学都很希望自己的语句能表现力Max,更有亮点,但是在很多时候,我们一贯的写作习惯其实已经将自己的文章拉低了很多档次,接下来可以来看看几组比较典型的“很难被发现”的表达易犯毛病。
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想要写一篇好的文章就需要具体到抠细节,在细节方面我们又该注意什么呢?话不多说,直接上例子:
On the one hand, some people believe that playing Olympic games(不是play games,参加比赛跟举办比赛不是一个意思,所以不要写错了,写错了会算偏题)can cost the funds of government.(表达不够 native,可以改为 some individu-als reckon that government would spend a wealth of money to hold the Olympic games). For example, when the country need(needs) to host a large sport com-petition, it would build some sport facilities to contain a large number of people from all of the world (around the world). It also need(needs to)employ some workers to manage the transport and regulate the rules when companions are playing, which will cost a lot of salaries( salary表示工资,用在这里不好,可以就用 money)
假如没有特别指出来,相信大家还不会发现,平时的一些表达习惯和用词习惯一段话就都体现得淋漓尽致,有些错误还很难发现,比如最末尾的用词money。
再来看一个例子:
Those who believe that robots could lead to detrimental effects on society have their solidseasons(reasons). One of the main issues is that the workplace which once need dozens upon dozens of human workers would disappear(工作场地会消失吗?消失的不是工作场地,而应该是很多工作会由机器人去做吧) as robots that could work efficiently would replace human beings, thus resulting in unemployment and more pressure of job-hunters. Besides, as technology develops, some high-tech robots might one day have their own awareness; therefore, the product which is created by humans is likely to in turn control people and pose a threat to the society.(这两个句子的因果关系读不出来,机器人有意识为什么结果是人类自己创造的产品会控制人们。中间的逻辑链差了一步 why) however, as the creators of robots, humans are able to maximize robots' advantages and to avoid the situation described above.
从这个案例可以看到同样是犯了一个蛮严重的错误,就是逻辑关系表达的时候没有理清楚,假设在考场上的话是非常致命的。然而类似机器人与人类的关系这样的话题很多,逻辑关系有时候也很难理清,这就需要我们不断去完善、思考。一个小细节就有可能决定了我们的写作方向,万一跑题了,后面就可想而知了。
细节决定成败,我们今天说到的都是一些平时备考写作时很难被发现的问题,所以说写作一定要多修改,多总结,才可以越来越好,质量越来越高!
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